Redline halp?

[obliviousally_lj]

I need halps. I'm making a relatively generic character sheet that I can tweak and edit for each of my characters (because they all have slightly different body types), but I'm having some issues. That first pose? Looks slouched. I don't know why and I'm not sure how to make it look more proper posture-wise.

I did use stock photo reference for this (I'll link it when/if I ever finish these), so that's why a lot of things actually look IN PROPORTION. But I can see a lot of flaws (I did a very loose skeleton sketch over the stock photos, then went in and fleshed it out, referring to the stock images when something seemed off). The head is too big (but then, I've a bit cartoony style) and I did accentuate the hips a lot (again, a bit stylized), but I'm trying to get it as close to generic as I can before messing with it for each individual character. This is pretty much Ally's build, without the pudge.

I'm pretty happy with the second and third one, I don't see anything OBVIOUS that I need to tweak, but if someone does, feel free to point it out. It's just the first one that's really messing with me.

Redlines are greatly appreciated!

Comments

[hellebore.livejournal.com]

I think the first one.. the head looks too tilted down (with the chin shape) or perhaps it is because it makes the neck look short. It's something with that area for sure.

[zeeth_kyrah]

The shoulders would be flatter, a slightly higher in relation to the chest, and with a sharper angle -- straighter downward. But that's for an at-attention pose. If you aren't drawing a soldier, I wouldn't worry too much about it.

[suzanami.livejournal.com]

what siege said. it's in the shoulders, definitely. i don't think it looks as slouchy as you think, though, tbh! just relaxed, and it'll look a lot better once it has a whole character on it. :3